Comments for The Music of Words http://www.apexdn.com/blog ...a celebration of story, speech and life! Tue, 30 Jun 2009 04:25:09 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 Comment on The Candy Bar Wrapper by James Evanow http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211&cpage=1#comment-176 James Evanow Tue, 30 Jun 2009 04:25:09 +0000 http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211#comment-176 Absolutely amazing Robert. It reminds me of the times that we would be playing out in front of my home as a young boy and there was always the occasion when Vicki Spencer would be riding around the neighborhood with my cousins who were the same age as I was. She was my girlfriend, the dollar ring that she wore on her finger told everyone so. I believe we were connected that way for about a year, although I do not remember saying more than one or two words to her that entire time. Most of the communication was done through her older sister. You see, Vicki was a princess to me and I have seen her occasionally over the last 30 years. I have often wondered what would have happened had we met at a later date in life. It was the warm evenings of summer that I come to mind the most from those days, but it was going home in the evenings to find my mother cooking dinner and that smell that would surround you as you walked in. No regrets there, only the longing for the memories that I remember and cherish the most. Thanks for bringing back the memories, well done! Absolutely amazing Robert. It reminds me of the times that we would be playing out in front of my home as a young boy and there was always the occasion when Vicki Spencer would be riding around the neighborhood with my cousins who were the same age as I was.
She was my girlfriend, the dollar ring that she wore on her finger told everyone so. I believe we were connected that way for about a year, although I do not remember saying more than one or two words to her that entire time. Most of the communication was done through her older sister. You see, Vicki was a princess to me and I have seen her occasionally over the last 30 years. I have often wondered what would have happened had we met at a later date in life.

It was the warm evenings of summer that I come to mind the most from those days, but it was going home in the evenings to find my mother cooking dinner and that smell that would surround you as you walked in. No regrets there, only the longing for the memories that I remember and cherish the most.

Thanks for bringing back the memories, well done!

]]> Comment on The Candy Bar Wrapper by Colin http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211&cpage=1#comment-173 Colin Mon, 29 Jun 2009 22:44:13 +0000 http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211#comment-173 Very good, Robert, you're an excellent writer. Very good, Robert, you’re an excellent writer.

]]> Comment on The Candy Bar Wrapper by Layne Hood http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211&cpage=1#comment-171 Layne Hood Mon, 29 Jun 2009 17:17:21 +0000 http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211#comment-171 Robert, very engaging. Most if not all have had some experience of "You can't go back home again." not to mention a stack of regrets & missed opportunities. You draw a suggestive sketch on why we can't fo back then splash it with vibrant colors in rich tones. As you bring us along with fairly stark & surprising branching, you assemble your ideas in a way that allows the reader to fill in the blanks with personal elements bonding us like family to the protagonist. Well done! Good luck in the contest. In my book, you should easily reach the top tier. Robert, very engaging. Most if not all have had some experience of “You can’t go back home again.” not to mention a stack of regrets & missed opportunities. You draw a suggestive sketch on why we can’t fo back then splash it with vibrant colors in rich tones. As you bring us along with fairly stark & surprising branching, you assemble your ideas in a way that allows the reader to fill in the blanks with personal elements bonding us like family to the protagonist. Well done! Good luck in the contest. In my book, you should easily reach the top tier.

]]> Comment on The Candy Bar Wrapper by jim fling http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211&cpage=1#comment-170 jim fling Mon, 29 Jun 2009 17:05:30 +0000 http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211#comment-170 Great story Robert, You painted a good picture in just 1000 words. I like the first person naritive style. The theme of crossroads or chances denied is a strong one. Great story Robert, You painted a good picture in just 1000 words. I like the first person naritive style. The theme of crossroads or chances denied is a strong one.

]]> Comment on The Candy Bar Wrapper by Tom Humphrey http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211&cpage=1#comment-169 Tom Humphrey Mon, 29 Jun 2009 16:14:54 +0000 http://www.apexdn.com/blog/?p=211#comment-169 Good story. Its tough to fit so much in to only 1000 words so I have to say you did very well. I have only one question, where did the "go home" paper with hearts for O's come from? Good story. Its tough to fit so much in to only 1000 words so I have to say you did very well. I have only one question, where did the “go home” paper with hearts for O’s come from?

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